Amy and Michelle on Using Concrete Details - English 111

Amy to Classmates

Dear Classmates,

The sentence that caught my eye [in "The Teacher Who Changed My Life" by Nicholas Gage] and my attention was, "The portly, well-dressed man who met me and my sisters seemed a foreign, authoritarian figure." The reason I liked this sentence was for the simple fact that I could see Nicholas' dad in my head. It was such a clear vision. I could see him and I could hear his voice in my head.

Sincerely,
Amy

Michelle to Amy

Hello Amy, Yes, I agree with you about the use of decriptive words used by Mr. Gage. I was able to get a mental picture of the characters as well as the scenery around them…. I believe this is what he was looking for when he composed it. An essay that readers could relate to whether they themselves had ever been in a situation such as his or simply were there via his writings.

Michelle

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